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And I quote... [Oct. 5th, 2006|09:01 pm]
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[el_kamino]
Here's the excerpt I mentioned tonight, from Monica Wood's "The Pocket Muse," which is excellent, by the way.
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A Tip on Style

Writing in the present tense requires extra attention to sentence structure. Try to vary the sentence structure so that the present tense recedes into the narrative. A string of simple declarative (subject-verb-object) sentences makes for a staccato feel that casts a neon light on your present-tense technique:

"Max walks into his office. It is too hot. Julie looks up suspiciously from her desk. The whole place takes on the feel of an interrogation. Even the lights seem brighter. He takes off his coat."

By combining sentences, attending to verbs, and altering sentence structure (for example, beginning with a phrase rather than a clause), you shed light on the story rather than the technique:

"Walking into the sweltering office, Max finds Julie eyeing him from her desk. Before he can manage to shed his coat, the place takes on the feel of an interrogation. Even the lights seem brighter."
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